"The Redemption"

[Luis J]

Good evening (here), I'm back with a quick piece I created with EWQLSO Silver and StormDrum (one hell of a program, might I add). It's a simple, quick piece. Obviously not one of my best. I enjoyed making it, nonetheless.

It actually has meaning behind it. The beginning takes place at a house in which a husband (MI5 Agent) finds his wife dead from a bullet wound. He knows who did it, so during the beginning, he's over his wife, thinking...and contimplating. Then, it picks up when he gets up and runs towards the open door and gets into his car. During the fast portion, he's going to his destination. At the end, he arrives and observes the building.

"The Redemption" (http://media.putfile.com/Immidiate-Music-1)

[Ecliptic]

Hi Luis,

in the first 24 seconds there are some issues with the drum that sounds like played into another hall than the other instruments and with the flute that sounds too synthy.
From 0:24 there is a good action mood bringed by the fast strings and cymbals.
You should work on the flute and on the drum to make them sounding more actual and, being that this is an "action" cue, you should also give a deeper sound to the mix using a larger number of low register instruments (i.e. double basses, tuba, etc.).

Cheers

[Phantom]

I love the drum patterns

Very well done

I agree with Ecliptic

IMO - Try to add some slight bass reverb if you can to the drums at the start

They sound a little to plain like they have bee overlayed onto an audio file

But a very nice piece otherwise :)

[Luis J]

Thank you guys for your comments. I'm not really...worried about this piece, since it was really just an experimental. Thank you, though for your feedback.

A piece I am mostly anxious to get feedback for, though is the one in this thread (http://www.soundsonline-forums.com/showthread.php?t=4411). Please check it out if you can. I'd greatly appriciate it.