help with a piece please?

[Evan]

hi guys im writing this piece and i'm not quit sure how I should continue it, Ive tried several ideas and non seem to work..i was hoping i could get some "emotional" suggestions on what you guys feels should come next..happy, sad, ext.

Also I need help coming up with a name, The thing is i didnt really have any direction when i started this, i just felt like writing something..

Help anyone?

http://www.evangamble.com/music/nothus-a-um.mp3

edit- i fixed the link that now has my title

[ToddK]

This site is acting wierd right now.

The soundsonline page wont load up all the way. Im not sure
what's up.

Cant get your link to work.

TK

[Liam]

Hi Evan,

I like where this piece is going. I kind of saw the first half of it as maybe opening credits for something like Harry Potter. I could see it maybe breaking down after the build up at the end into something dark and brooding if you were to continue it. I like the fact that you asked what "emotional" direction it should go in. I think that is so much more important than what technical direction, or style it should follow. Emotion first, everything else 2nd.
As far as a name. Hmm, something dark yet a bit whimsicle. "Spellbound" came to mind for some reason.

Great piece! Looking forward to hearing more!

P.S. I think its really cool when someone invites you into their own creative process, and values other peoples opinions. Now thats what this forum is about!

Liam

[ToddK]

I dont understand how you got the link to work.

The site is unavailable. I shortened the link to get to Evans
music folder, and i still cant download anything.

How did you download that piece? I dont get it...


TK

[Liam]

Hey Todd,

Thats weird, I just played it again now with the original link. It seems to be working fine here....you never know with servers though. Could be going in and out tonight.

Liam

[Mills2k]

I like ! I echo the wizard thing, though it seems also a lot like a mad scientist to me. I'll also echo the title music statement. Reminds me of the beginning to Edward Scissorhands... at least, that's if I recall the music correctly! And if I don't, this could be that beginning .

That said, artistically, to me at least, it seems like it should settle into something calm and subdued, peaceful almost. Slower, less forceful, coming out of that crash. Or if you want to keep a similarly grim mood, something creepy with sparse percussion or something, really echo-ey. That's what I'm imagining at least (geez... why can't I do this for my own music?!).

For a title? Words that come to mind include "Grim" and "Tinker"... "The Grim Tinkerer"? hahaha! I dunno... the "Spellbound" title seems almost to fit, but it doesn't connote the... evilness or mysteriousness of what's going on in the music, I don't think...

P.S. The download seems to be working...

[lil-man]

Why continue it? It stands pretty well on it's own. If I were using it for opening credits, I would have faded to black on the very last attack, and let it die out before any visuals come onscreen.

I like it as is.

[Mills2k]

Actually, I meant to say something to that same effect lil-man, when I first heard it... I do think it's pretty good as standalone, and don't really think it NEEDS to go on. It depends on how long you want the piece to be though, and what you're gonna use it for.

[Steve Karl]

It's really nice as it is.

My idea is to look at it like a chase scene.
The last gong hit is where the car goes off the cliff and the film goes into slow motion
but the driver totally disassociates from the event and looks into the sky.

Strings fade in ( or maybe a solo oboe ) ... Like a dream. No defined rhythm. Break away from the previous rhythm
and meter.
Wash through some chords. Use that as a transition and move into some other
mood.

Just a first impression.

Good work on this. Thanks for posting.

Steve

[Evan]

thanks for the help everyone so far..i think what im going to do next with it is do the no-meter idea and try to make it dark and pretty at the same time..eh? I definantly want to continue it because I need to develope that theme stated in the beggining...its like an undeveloped character. Once I break the piece down to a meterless dark/pretty thing, i think ill bring it back up and re-state the theme in full glory.

As for a title I like the idea of spellbound but not the way spellbound actually sounds..something that is majestic and dark..Ill have to think about it further. Why cant i come up with cool names like Don davis.."saw bitch workhorse" YEAH!

thanks for the help so far..keep em coming if anyone has anything further to add!